Coming Back to Leave
When I first had my book published, in 2011, it was the realization of a long held dream. I had always wanted to write, but never felt like it would come to be something that I could actually accomplish. Due to a total upset in how I thought my life was to play out, I found myself back in North Carolina, and happened upon a group called "Writers in Motion" which sought to foster the creativity of those who WANTED to write. Belinda Guyton, the leader of this group, was always enthusiastic, always ready to guide us to make the dream come true for ourselves. (Her first book, "I Shall Live and Not Die" is a personal story about her own life.) I recalled having created a "vision board" at one time and on it was "I am a published author" and "I am a screenwriter" as well as some other goals/dreams. After having my book published, I reaffirmed my intention to write a screenplay, and through circumstances, met a film-maker who challenged me to write a script for him to review. He gave me just a few guidelines and elements that we was working with, and I was free to come up with the crux of the story. Long story short, he and his team liked what I had written and with a few of his own changes, he actually filmed the story. As ecstatic as I was to be part of something else that had actually come to fruition, I was blown away by the fact that the short, "Canonize Me" was also selected to be in the Court Métrage (Short Film Showcase) for the 2012 Cannes Film Festival. To me this was a major accomplishment. After that, I was challenged again to write another short, and the only parameters given me was that it should be a one-actor piece and be about 10 minutes long. One of the stories I had begun writing years earlier came back to me, and I challenged myself to condense the emotion of it into these parameters. The team again liked what I had written and it is now in production.
I am so energized by the past two years in particular that I have formed a production company, "Bits and Peaces Productions, LLC" to further my intention of continuing to write, and to write screenplays, and someday SOON to have my own stories brought to a larger audience. What I wanted to do with this blog entry is actually share the most recent script I had written for you to read. I am currently working on a spec script which is a comedy, but after that I will expand this script into a full story. I welcome any questions and feedback. Let me know what you think. And thank you for taking the time to read it. (note: the working title has changed a few times, and currently I am referring to this work as "Coming Back To Leave.")
Coming Back to Leave
©2012 Brian Todd Barnette
©2012 Brian Todd Barnette
Interior - small bungalow: morning: present day
Varying SHOTS of WHAT SEEMS TO BE AN EMPTY HOME as TELEPHONE rings; A LIVING room, a BEDROOM.
interior - same house - kitchen - continuous.
Shift focus to notice man in mid 30's drinking coffee at wooden table in a modest kitchen. He gets up and crosses room to the phone on small telephone-table, he stops and looks at it while it continues to ring. Then it stops. He pauses then returns to kitchen table and sits back down, toying with a pen as he stares at a blank note pad on the table.
He looks around and we see more of the kitchen. It is clean, with traditional cabinets and just a few appliances and knick-knacks on the counter. The man sets down the pen, and we hear his thoughts, in a vague, almost matter-of-fact tone. Not cold, but no real hint at depth of any emotions.
I can't believe what I'm doing. I am going to actually leave you. It's like I am the last one to really get it. After such a long time of trying my best, I can't fix this.
He stands up and begins to wander around the house as we continue to hear his thoughts.
interior - same home- living room - continuous.
Man walks into living room from kitchen.
It's strange.To think we lasted as long as we have. Even our friends said we were mismatched early on.
He touches several objects in the living area as he reflects; a small framed pair of theater tickets, two sea-shells, a plaster of a dog's paw-print.
You were the one who wanted to get married someday. You always said you would convince me. I thought I may reconsider, but I know I will never get married. I am convinced it wouldn't last. Especially now.
He walks into a short hallway.
interior - same home - bedroom - continuous.
Man walks into bedroom from hallway.
He walks through bedroom to closet and opens closet door. He pulls a suitcase from a shelf, takes it back into the room and opens it on the bed.
interior -same home- closet - continutous.
He returns to the closet. It is neatly arranged with all men's clothing. He slowly begins choosing various articles of clothing. His hands move slowly over the clothes stopping occasionally on some articles; a pair of jeans, a novelty T-shirt, several colorful ties from a tie hanger.
...So different...and yet we wore each others clothes. What's mine? What's yours? Does it matter? Are these your T-shirts and jeans? Are these my short sleeved shirts and khakis? Does that matter? I could buy a whole new wardrobe and still look the same on the outside. It's the inside that has changed ...broken. I can't dress that up.
interior - same home- bedroom - continuous.
Man returns to the bed with items of clothing; jeans, pants, shirts, etc. He begins to fold several articles of clothing into the suitcase. he goes to a bureau and chooses socks, under garments from the drawers and a wrist watch from the top of the bureau. He fingers a few other items of jewelery on the top of the bureau.
Things I always thougt but never asked... which one of us had the sunnier disposition? Who makes better jokes? Now it's different questions. Which friends will treat me the same? Who really likes "me" and not just "us?" Do I even care?
The phone rings again and he stops and listens but still does not move to answer it.
Telephone rings a few more times then stops.
He finishes packing the suitcase with the clothes and wanders into the bathroom.
interior - same home- small bathroom - continuous.
There are two different toothbrushes, two different types of razors, two different colognes.
Were the odds against us anyway? You believed in God and went to church, I never could. You belived in a lot more than I did. What does your faith say aobut what I am doing? Do you still love me? Do I still love you? I'm sure I do, but I have to block that out or I couldn't do this. And I have to.
Man returns to bedroom.
Interior - same home- bedroom - continuous.
He has brought one of each item from the bathroom and puts them into the side of the suitcase.
I Know it's not your fault. I know its not "MY" fault. Hell, it's not anyone's fault. Still, I wonder if I could just be angry. Or hate you.
Man walks out of bedroom carrying suitcase.
interior - same home - living room- continuous.
He brings the suitcase into the living area sets it down. He walks toward to the kitchen he passes a small table and he looks down at a grouping of pictures in various frames. Our vantage point is from behind the frames as he looks down, slowing as he passes.
interior - same home - kitchen - continuous.
Entering the kitchen he glances at the silent phone. He then moves to the table and picks up the coffee cup from which he had been drinking, washes it in the sink, dries it and sets it onto a small shelf with only one other coffee cup on it. The two cups are different in color and design.
No, it wouldn't be easier to hate you.
Close up of man adjusting the two coffee cups, moving them closer together with handles facing the same direction.
I'd never be able to do this unless I loved you. Completely.
Now his cell phone rings as we see it on the small table in the kitchen. He picks it up and looks at the caller ID. We see the name "Patti." He answers it. We only hear his portion of the conversation as he moves back into the living area.
Hey Patti-O. (Pause) Yes, I am about to leave. (pause) No, it isn't easy... this is what he wanted.
Man exits kitchen back to living room.
interior - same house - living room - continuous.
He moves to a box that is on a table and pulls out an urn. We see that it is a simple funerary urn that would hold ashes of cremains, and a label on the box reads "Martin Funeral Home."
Yeah, it was nice. That's what you say right? That's what everyone says. It was nice. (Pause) More for them than for me. (Pause) He wanted to be taken to the lake. I owe it to him. (voice cracks) I'm leaving him there.
No, I coldn't leave you unless I loved you. I'd want you with me always. Even like this. There was just no time to change our minds.
He sets the urn down with his back to the camera.
Camera view begins to widen out slowly.
Man return to phone conversation as scene begins to WHITE OUT.
I will see you when I get to Chicago. I can finish things here any time. (Pause) I just can't believe I'm doing this.
Muted conversation continues as scene becomes completely white.
Fade to white